Finding Your w88 mobile in Personal Statements

Your personal statement is an opportunity for an admissions or review committee to get to know you, the “you” that cannot be captured in a CV or resume. For that reason, it is important to be confident, be honest, and be yourself. Below are four common writing mistakes that “hide” your individual w88 mobile and undermine the effectiveness of your essay.

Academic w88 mobile

Excessive academic language can make a w88 mobile statement seem overwrought and artificial. Write as though you are speaking with a colleague, rather than publishing in a journal.

Instead of:

  • “Based on extensive w88 mobile experience and exemplary coursework, medicine is obviously a challenge that will last a lifetime.”

Try:

  • &w88 mobile;I have spent a lifetime preparing to join the field of medicine because it challenges and excites me.”

Instead of:

  • “The profundity of the didactic and stochastic exemplifications of my academic career naturally gravitate a candidate of my paramount abilities towards fulfilling the raison d’être of my presence in w88 mobile program.”

Try:

  • “My broad knowledge of science writing makes me a good candidate for w88 mobile program.”

Passive w88 mobile

The use of passive w88 mobile can muddle the meaning of your sentences and can downplay the importance of your accomplishments.

In active w88 mobile, the subject performs the action of the verb. For example: “I wrote the personal statement.” In passive w88 mobile, the original subject moves to the position of the direct object, so the verb is no longer connected to the true subject of the sentence. For example: “The personal statement was written by me.”

Find passive w88 mobile in your essay by looking for “to be” forms of verbs such as “am, is, was, were, are, been” or “to have” forms such as “have, has, or had.” Passive sentences often have “by” phrases, as seen in the example given above.

Instead of:

  • &w88 mobile;I got two academic internships and was a member of the Honor Society…”

Try:

  • &w88 mobile;I excelled in two academic internships and was inducted into the Honor Society.”

Instead of:

  • &w88 mobile;The scholarships were awarded to me because I have earned good grades and have worked as a Teaching Assistant.”

Try:

  • &w88 mobile;I won academic scholarships for my high GPA and undergraduate work as a Teaching Assistant.”

Hedging

“Hedging” refers to writing that uses qualifiers and vagueness to create a tone of modesty. Your w88 mobile statement is not a place to be modest. Some examples of common hedging words are as follows: “seems, tends, may, might, suggests, often, usually, probable, assume, conceivable, sometimes, believe.”

Instead of:

  • &w88 mobile;Although I may seem an unlikely candidate for law school, my passion makes it likely that I will succeed.”

Try:

  • &w88 mobile;My passion for the law drives me to achieve at the highest levels. For example, . . .”

Instead of:

  • &w88 mobile;I believe that veterinary medicine may be the best path for me.”

Try:

  • &w88 mobile;Veterinary medicine is the best path for me because…”

Addressing Negative Information

Using your w88 mobile statement to address negative aspects of your educational background is often unnecessary unless a negative experience can showcase positive qualities about yourself. If you do choose to address low grades or bad test scores, for example, place the emphasis on what you learned or how you changed as a result of these experiences.

Instead of:

  • &w88 mobile;My grades fell because I had to work two jobs to pay for rent and food.”

Try:

  • &w88 mobile;My strong sense of self-reliance helped me stay focused when financial issues started to impact my school work.”

Instead of:

  • &w88 mobile;My test scores were low, but I’m sure that my recommendations will make up for it.”

Try:

  • &w88 mobile;I have created associations with the foremost biological researchers, including Dr. John Smith and Dr. Jane Jones. These mentoring relationships have convinced me that bioethical research is both personally fascinating and essential to humanity.”

(Source: Christie, Mari and McCandless, Sean. “Writing for the Business of Your Life: w88 mobile Statements and Scholarship Essays.” University of Colorado Denver Writing Center. 2010. PowerPoint file.)